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Superb storytelling, CB. The setting felt normal, even though it contained unusual elements, e.g. neural enhancements. Terrific action sequence that kept me on the edge of my seat. The ending was a perfect fit for the Twilight Zone.

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Lake Boise! An excellent, thought provoking story.

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Nothing quite like flooding one’s hometown!

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"Yet, in letting go, he forgot to hold on to the reality of life and those around him." Awesome. Great story!

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It’s like walking a tightrope!

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Craaazy story. I want whatever surfboard thing that is - idk what you picture but I had a whole image and it was very cool. Also fantastic ending there.

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And thanks!

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They exist now. Look for eFoil surfboard! Super cool!!!

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Triggered. 😅 Great story! It's cool you connected it to your other stories as well. I love when writers have their own little shared universe. I do the same myself.

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If you like that, then check out my character and location profiles! (I’ve had lots of time to keep adding to the backstories and world-building as I await my publisher to get to my manuscript, Shattered…⏳)

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Damn. The way Noah's stuck there, staring at that blank screen, feeling like a total failure just because he can't write some perfect essay... I've been there. Maybe not with the whole neural enhancement stuff, but that feeling of being crushed under everyone's expectations? That's real.

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I figured a writer or two there might understand that crippling weight and could relate! Thanks for being the first to point it out!

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Wonderful! The hide and seek with the drones was exciting!

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I need some of those pills.

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Just make sure you alternate where you place them! 🫣

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